Tuesday, August 16, 2011

Teaser Tuesday!

I haven't done one of these in a while, so I figured I'd remedy that. This little, unedited excerpt is from a manuscript called BREAKING SKIN, which is not YA (shocking) and is so weird that I don't know whether I'll ever be able to do anything with it.

I have never been as aware of the sky as I was in Devlin. Of its sheer size and might, its ability to put a roof over the entire world. When I was a child, it inspired so much awe in me that I used to sit out on the back deck, with a mug of cocoa warming my fingers, and our old mutt Rusty warming my feet, humming beneath my breath, staring at the sky.

I never read constellations, or tried to chart the future. I didn’t need to, because at night in Devlin the stars poured across the sky thicker than whipped cream across a pavlova, and you felt that just watching them, just holding them in your line of vision, a little piece of magic might find its hideaway inside you. It’s one of the things I miss most about Devlin, the ache that the sky, the landscape, could put in you.

It’s different, here in Melbourne, the sky -- some of its grandeur is lost. Especially at night when the stars are few and far between, scattered pinpricks of light, easily outshone by car tail-lights.

8 comments:

  1. I really like it! Thanks for sharing! If it's not YA, is it literary fiction? The writing is beautiful.

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  2. Amazing as usual :) Love the last bit especially.

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  3. Rachele -- I'm not sure. Maybe. Literary to me has always seemed like a label that people stick on your work after it's published, haha. Although, I think this might be magical realism, actually, but it could change as I draft.

    And thanks for the comments, guys :)

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  4. I've missed your teasers, Vee. Your writing is so lovely, you really do manage to paint pictures with words.

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  5. guh this is so vivid and lovely and sort of dreamy-floaty

    <3

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  6. I've never seen your actual writing before, but this teaser represents all of what I've imagined it to be. The imagery, the depth, and the feel of these short paragraphs sound like they were born of your heart. As do the blog posts you write, and the comments you leave... When a writer is passionate, passion flows in abudance and dries as ink.

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  7. Gosh, I love your writing. Your prose captures my attention and keeps it until the end, and I always want more. Beautiful as always!

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  8. This is truly a beautiful piece of writing. I love looking up at the sky myself whether its day or night. The sky can be beautiful at all times of the day and night I find. You capture its beauty very clearly here, which is just lovely. And your 1st POV is just AMAZINGLY done. Usually I dislike 1st POV because it feels like its missing something (in my opinion of course) but yours just made everything clear and that my friend is a skill.

    Can't wait to see/read more from this manuscript. :D

    And its not YA?! Well where do you think it'll go if you have an idea or what were you trying to write for if you had planned it that way? Or how would you describe the story as being?

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